mneme | (Reply)

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Whee!

Little scansiony bits:

batyatoon, this
• That seas may boil and the land may burn;
doesn't scan right for me unless I make "boil" two syllables (~ "boy-ell") or hold it like a half-note. Would you consider
?→ That seas may boil and that the land may burn;

mneme, this
• Nowhere can I be, since Peace I found,
feels to me lacking the first ˘ (unaccented syllable), and I stumbled while reading it. What about
?→ Then nowhere can I be, since Peace I found,

So then we'd have

Deny me answer to my heart's behest,
Deprive me of my property and lot,
Remove my person, force me by duress,
To where the land shan't bear me, I care not.
For I am unencumbered by oppression,
Nor canst thou wrest the sky from my possession.

Though I be exiled to the endless dark,
And though they tell the world I'll not return;
Though thou may'st fan the flame or set the spark
That seas may boil and that the land may burn;
My will's my own, and so the skies shall be --
And neither wilt thou ever take from me.

Then nowhere can I be, since Peace I found,
But mine is that which lies above the ground.