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Joshua Kronengold ([personal profile] mneme) wrote 2015-01-08 06:38 am (UTC)

I think "now" rather than "then" for the leader on the first foot; it keeps the loose alliteration going and emphasizes the time that's so important in "since I found Serenity".

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